A poem (working progress)
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Just thought I'd share a poem I am writing (working progress) ... If you would like to add or change a verse, you may find it therapeutic... I did! Feel free to comment :)
Knock knock knock
It's time to search o clock
It's an early winter's morning,
I'm awoken by a commotion,
I grab the kids from their sleeping cots,
And the rest of my story sets motion.
I watched them tear my home to shreds,
Searching through every drawer,
There were at least ten men in my house,
Looking through stuff, God knows what for.
Knock knock knock
It's facing it o'clock
I waited by my phone all day,
Assuming it was all a big mistake,
Talking to all these agencies about us,
Praying they wouldn't take my kids away.
When you finally came home,
You had a look of awful woe,
You told me all the things you'd done,
You were no longer a friend, just foe.
Knock knock knock
It's seperation o clock
For weeks I couldn't speak to you,
What you did made me feel sick,
But I was the one who was greiving,
My perfect life, gone so quick.
My family told me to leave you,
Something I thought about good and hard,
But through it all, I couldn't do it,
I just had to let down my guard.
Knock knock knock
It's living alone o clock
The social banned you from the house,
Left alone to raise the kids,
What would I even tell them?
Dad's done things even God forbids.
You tried to do things when you could,
But nothing was enough,
You said sorry a thousand times,
But I'm sorry - I was finding things tough.
Knock knock knock
It's isolation o'clock
Everyone says to leave you,
Lock him away and throw the key,
But something is telling me to stay,
I really don't want to flee.
I know you're not a bad person really,
What you did was a big mistake,
I can't control how I feel for you,
They're my feelings I cannot fake.
Knock knock knock
It's trial o clock
I sat alone in my bed,
Scared to think about tomorrow,
The truth will out, they always say,
I know I'll be full of sorrow.
The judge looks you up and down,
I sit beside your mother and cry,
I can't handle what they're saying about you,
But for sake of the family I will try.
Knock knock knock
It's nearly over o clock
My family have walked out on me,
They say I'm stupid to stay,
But something inside is saying stay put,
They have no idea how I feel today.
The lack of support is unreal,
Nobody thinks of us left behind,
There's things I can't tell anyone,
My mind is in constant decline.
Knock knock knock
It's full disclosure o clock
When we dreamt of the future together,
Our family home and dog,
I had no idea it would end like this,
Just me, my kids and the fog.
Knock knock knock
There's no time left on the clock.
Knock knock knock
It's time to search o clock
It's an early winter's morning,
I'm awoken by a commotion,
I grab the kids from their sleeping cots,
And the rest of my story sets motion.
I watched them tear my home to shreds,
Searching through every drawer,
There were at least ten men in my house,
Looking through stuff, God knows what for.
Knock knock knock
It's facing it o'clock
I waited by my phone all day,
Assuming it was all a big mistake,
Talking to all these agencies about us,
Praying they wouldn't take my kids away.
When you finally came home,
You had a look of awful woe,
You told me all the things you'd done,
You were no longer a friend, just foe.
Knock knock knock
It's seperation o clock
For weeks I couldn't speak to you,
What you did made me feel sick,
But I was the one who was greiving,
My perfect life, gone so quick.
My family told me to leave you,
Something I thought about good and hard,
But through it all, I couldn't do it,
I just had to let down my guard.
Knock knock knock
It's living alone o clock
The social banned you from the house,
Left alone to raise the kids,
What would I even tell them?
Dad's done things even God forbids.
You tried to do things when you could,
But nothing was enough,
You said sorry a thousand times,
But I'm sorry - I was finding things tough.
Knock knock knock
It's isolation o'clock
Everyone says to leave you,
Lock him away and throw the key,
But something is telling me to stay,
I really don't want to flee.
I know you're not a bad person really,
What you did was a big mistake,
I can't control how I feel for you,
They're my feelings I cannot fake.
Knock knock knock
It's trial o clock
I sat alone in my bed,
Scared to think about tomorrow,
The truth will out, they always say,
I know I'll be full of sorrow.
The judge looks you up and down,
I sit beside your mother and cry,
I can't handle what they're saying about you,
But for sake of the family I will try.
Knock knock knock
It's nearly over o clock
My family have walked out on me,
They say I'm stupid to stay,
But something inside is saying stay put,
They have no idea how I feel today.
The lack of support is unreal,
Nobody thinks of us left behind,
There's things I can't tell anyone,
My mind is in constant decline.
Knock knock knock
It's full disclosure o clock
When we dreamt of the future together,
Our family home and dog,
I had no idea it would end like this,
Just me, my kids and the fog.
Knock knock knock
There's no time left on the clock.
That was bloody amazing and resonated hugely with me.
lovely Lee mentioned some creative writing groups in last week's podcast, if you're not doing that already you deffo should.
I am crying a tear of solidarity xx
lovely Lee mentioned some creative writing groups in last week's podcast, if you're not doing that already you deffo should.
I am crying a tear of solidarity xx
This poem is stunningly good and heartbreakingly sad at the same time. It's almost impossible to describe the pain of this journey, but it sometimes helps to try to articulate it. I made a similar attempt in my 'Planet Knock' post (pinned at the top of this page). An extract of this was read out at the recent PIER23 conference (I am in touch with Prof Rachel Armitage through a support group she's involved in - she is absolutely dedicated to raising awareness of the impact of online offences on family and friends of offenders and is having a positive influence in making changes in a number of areas). It gives me some small comfort in this monstrous mountain of hurt that my words might in some way resonate with or be helpful to others. And your poem will definitely do the same.
Gardener93
You poem made me want to cry. Sums up pretty much everything, really.
You poem made me want to cry. Sums up pretty much everything, really.
Oh my goodness, that hits hard.
You're very talented xxx
You're very talented xxx
Thank you all. It was never really to share, just a creative outlet that really helped xx
Gardner xx
Just beautiful certainly brings out the emotions we all deal with x you are very talented xx
Just beautiful certainly brings out the emotions we all deal with x you are very talented xx